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Dan Ree Thinks His Rhymes Are Fancy? I’ll Torch Him Sadly, Not Just Badly..
Think You Have Me? Well Like ‘Happy Asians’ I’ll Keep This L Handy And Lend It To You ‘Gladly’*
Ya Gon Need A Boost To Win… I’m Plantin Ya Ass In The Dirt And Then Stompin Like Seeds And Juice
He Cant Mack Fems So The Grocery Store Is The Only Time We Know That ‘Ree Produce’*
Dan Needs A Hoe, Relax.. I Got Him Pacin The Floor It Sounds Like A Stampede And Groans
Shape Up.. Everyone Knows The Truth, That This ‘Realitys’ Fake Like A Tila Tequila Show
The End Of The 3rd And This Bitch Is ‘Wary’, Not Impressed Cuz The Rhymes You Set Is Soft D
Fuckin Softy! Have The ‘Blood Draining To Your Head’ Cuz After This You’ll Be Left In ‘Aw, Ry’*
I Bet It’s Hard To Keep Ya Mind Off A Sandwich.. This Win Is Mine So Bow Down Bitch
Sweet And Rich Pastries Is The Closest Thing To Good That We’ll Find Out Of ‘Dan-Ish’*

*Glad Lee
*Grocery Stores Carry Produce… Reproduce
*Wary Scrambled Is Awry… Awe Ree… Awry Means In A Turned Or Twisted Position
*Danish

With a loss he’s got a lot hatred, shoulda thought this through ya no so great kid/
An he even gets ‘red faced’ with wins<<cause he can’t drop 2 like he’s constipated//**
The runts on that stunnin tip actin tough in writts, in fighting dudes a cunt to me/
Son your not ‘runnin’ shit, but the frail bitches alias is biting a ‘shoe’ company//**

You’ll get beat an abused,
…….watch this east indian lose, even ya crew prolly would laugh hard/
Just look at the geek thinkin confused<<”Does ‘bolly wood‘ have rap stars?”//**


Ive literally won ten times more then you,, an this nerd gets the courage for bashing?/
Ya shitty puns leave me stunned as why ya rappin……….
………………………………son prolly thought text battling had Affirmative action//
Ya last in the ‘alphabet’ nerdy bitch, just like ya whole life not to mention ‘textin’/
Cause the only time ‘Z’s first is a myth<< like in ‘roadside intoxication testing’//**

** he has 1 win
** baysixusa is a ‘running’ shoe company http://www.baysixusa.com/
** he looks like his confused and thinking in his pic, no hate on the race thing tho
** it’s a myth in roadside dui testings that they ask you to recite the alphabet backwards, and thats the only time Z would come first

good battle bro, no hate

uppin for votes

Zain:

Dan Ree Thinks His Rhymes Are Fancy? I’ll Torch Him Sadly, Not Just Badly..
Think You Have Me? Well Like ‘Happy Asians’ I’ll Keep This L Handy And Lend It To You ‘Gladly’*
^Rhyming +1, Flow +1, Pers +0, Pun +0.5, WP +1, Complex +0.5 = 4
Ya Gon Need A Boost To Win… I’m Plantin Ya Ass In The Dirt And Then Stompin Like Seeds And Juice
He Cant Mack Fems So The Grocery Store Is The Only Time We Know That ‘Ree Produce’*
^Rhyming +1, Flow +1, Pers +1, Pun +1, WP+1, Complex +1 = 6
Dan Needs A Hoe, Relax.. I Got Him Pacin The Floor It Sounds Like A Stampede And Groans
Shape Up.. Everyone Knows The Truth, That This ‘Realitys’ Fake Like A Tila Tequila Show
^Rhyming +1, Flow +0.5, Pers +1, Pun +0.5, WP +1, Complex +0.5 = 4.5
The End Of The 3rd And This Bitch Is ‘Wary’, Not Impressed Cuz The Rhymes You Set Is Soft D
Fuckin Softy! Have The ‘Blood Draining To Your Head’ Cuz After This You’ll Be Left In ‘Aw, Ry’*
^Rhyming +1, Flow +1, Pers +1, Pun +1, WP +1, Complex +1 = 6
I Bet It’s Hard To Keep Ya Mind Off A Sandwich.. This Win Is Mine So Bow Down Bitch
Sweet And Rich Pastries Is The Closest Thing To Good That We’ll Find Out Of ‘Dan-Ish’*
^Rhyming +1, Flow +0.5, Pers +1, Pun +1, WP +1, Complex +0.5 = 5

25.5/30 = B+

Dan:

With a loss he’s got a lot hatred, shoulda thought this through ya no so great kid/
An he even gets ‘red faced’ with wins<<cause he can’t drop 2 like he’s constipated//**
^Rhyming +0.5, Flow +1, Pers +0.5, Pun +0.5, WP +0.5, Complex +0.5 = 3.5
The runts on that stunnin tip actin tough in writts, in fighting dudes a cunt to me/
Son your not ‘runnin’ shit, but the frail bitches alias is biting a ‘shoe’ company//**
^Rhyming +1, Flow +1, Pers +1, Pun +0.5, WP +0.5, Complex +0 = 4
You’ll get beat an abused,
…….watch this east indian lose, even ya crew prolly would laugh hard/
Just look at the geek thinkin confused<<”Does ‘bolly wood‘ have rap stars?”//**
^Rhyming +0.5, Flow +1, Pers +1, Pun +0.5, WP +0, Complex +0 = 2
Ive literally won ten times more then you,, an this nerd gets the courage for bashing?/
Ya shitty puns leave me stunned as why ya rappin……….
………………………………son prolly thought text battling had Affirmative action//
^Rhyming +1, Flow +0.5, Pers +0, Pun +0.5, WP +0, Complex +0.5 = 2.5
Ya last in the ‘alphabet’ nerdy bitch, just like ya whole life not to mention ‘textin’/
Cause the only time ‘Z’s first is a myth<< like in ‘roadside intoxication testing’//**
^Rhyming +1, Flow +0.5, Pers +1, Pun +1, WP +0, Complex +0.5 = 4

16/30 = C-

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Zain, ya verse was mos def more entertaining for my tastes and lotta good wordplay. The thing that bit you in da ass was that a couple of ya bars wasnt heavy hitters and the opener wasnt personal.

Dan, I enjoyed your verse also but it seemed like you were tryin too hard, real talk. The whole website, name bitin personal bar was a reach to me.. Iono but I'm pretty sure ya had to search that one up. Lacks weight. Punches didnt land as heavy hitters cept for da last one. Your rhyming was also broke in some parts. Fee'meh?

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Battle victor = Zain Srai

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Dan had personal punches using Zains name, country and records expect for the 4th bar. I really think that 4th bar slowed you down because Zain was going hard at it every bar. Zain used Dans name one way or another in everybar and landed a decent punch on each one of them.
I really liked Dans third bars flow and rhyming, (i dont understand why Marshall Vick gave that bar a +0.5 on rhyming... there was 4 syllables he rhymed there, and internals) but the punch wasnt the best.

All in all Dan had more complex rhymes (he was rhyming 3~4 syllables all over the place) but Zain did have more wordplay and punches/using refferences to his name and such. If Dan had fixed up that 4th bar, it would have been very close, could have gone either way in my opinion. But Dans 4th bar was just too fillerish... wasnt personal at all. both were dope, good battle.

vote: zain (stronger personal punches)

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Lemme break it down for ya Thomas--

Bar 3 (end):
beat an abused

Bar 4:
…….watch this east indian lose, even ya crew prolly would laugh hard/
Just look at the geek thinkin confused<<”Does ‘bolly wood‘ have rap stars?”//**

Not sure if this was meant ta be a continuation but..
beat an abuse-indian lose = Imo, broken

And..

even ya crew-indian lose = Imo, broken
prolly would laugh hard(5)-bolly wood have rap stars(6) = Imo, way broken
indian lose-thinkin confused = Imo, good internal

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So, to clarify da reason why I gave dis bar a 0.5 in rhyming is because most of it was broken, imo. Out of all those attempts, only one really worked well. Again... ya'll need to adjust ta my voting ways.

regardless, my vote still goes to zain for the reasons i outlined.

Zain:

Dan Ree Thinks His Rhymes Are Fancy? I’ll Torch Him Sadly, Not Just Badly..
Think You Have Me? Well Like ‘Happy Asians’ I’ll Keep This L Handy And Lend It To You ‘Gladly’*
--Not a very personal bar... Flow, I could follow and decent punch and wordplay

Ya Gon Need A Boost To Win… I’m Plantin Ya Ass In The Dirt And Then Stompin Like Seeds And Juice
He Cant Mack Fems So The Grocery Store Is The Only Time We Know That ‘Ree Produce’*
--I'm not really feeling the set up in this one but the bar as a whole is good one... Nice nameplay and multis

Dan Needs A Hoe, Relax.. I Got Him Pacin The Floor It Sounds Like A Stampede And Groans
Shape Up.. Everyone Knows The Truth, That This ‘Realitys’ Fake Like A Tila Tequila Show
--Hidden personal in this one, I like it... Not the hardest punch but it was there

The End Of The 3rd And This Bitch Is ‘Wary’, Not Impressed Cuz The Rhymes You Set Is Soft D
Fuckin Softy! Have The ‘Blood Draining To Your Head’ Cuz After This You’ll Be Left In ‘Aw, Ry’*
--Good wordplay/nameplay.. Again, not the hardest but it works nice for other aspects

I Bet It’s Hard To Keep Ya Mind Off A Sandwich.. This Win Is Mine So Bow Down Bitch
Sweet And Rich Pastries Is The Closest Thing To Good That We’ll Find Out Of ‘Dan-Ish’*
--The multis were good here and nice wordplay, pretty good closer..

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Dan:

With a loss he’s got a lot hatred, shoulda thought this through ya no so great kid/
An he even gets ‘red faced’ with wins<<cause he can’t drop 2 like he’s constipated//**
--Good opener but the personal wasn't very hard hitting

The runts on that stunnin tip actin tough in writts, in fighting dudes a cunt to me/
Son your not ‘runnin’ shit, but the frail bitches alias is biting a ‘shoe’ company//**
--Nice personal off his name jus not the hardest punch although it could have been with a change in some wording or phrase

You’ll get beat an abused,
…….watch this east indian lose, even ya crew prolly would laugh hard/
Just look at the geek thinkin confused<<”Does ‘bolly wood‘ have rap stars?”//**
--A bit of humor but again, not a very hard punch... Not entirely personal but it's getting there

Ive literally won ten times more then you,, an this nerd gets the courage for bashing?/
Ya shitty puns leave me stunned as why ya rappin……….
………………………………son prolly thought text battling had Affirmative action//
--More like a flex in your first line.. I'm not liking this bar because it fails to land for me as a good punch or personal diss

Ya last in the ‘alphabet’ nerdy bitch, just like ya whole life not to mention ‘textin’/
Cause the only time ‘Z’s first is a myth<< like in ‘roadside intoxication testing’//**
--I think the multi in here was broken...? Correct me if I'm wrong but other than that, a solid closer and nice nameplay

Overall: This was a pretty good spar and evenly matched, if you ask me. I thought Zain came in attacking Dan's name like crazy although they weren't the hardest.. And I saw some hidden personals on Dan's weight in there that might've went over some heads. He had a pretty nice verse all around. There was multis, punches, wordplay, personals, etc. Same with Dan's verse.. I liked the rhymes from both of you. It comes down to who I think edged it in the fight for being more personal and this was a close one..

+1 Zain

Zain wins 3-0

-Closed & Updated-

damn i wish i didnt use those nameplays on you in quick scripts lol, nice win bro...we'll have to rematch soon big ups